New poem. comments welcome.:D?

it's entitled "The Door to Paradise"

right now, there is a door,

and beyond that door,

is a paradise.

a place where flowers,

are always in bloom,

a place where there is no pain,

a place where happiness reign,

a place of bounty,

a place full of love,

a paradise indeed,

a land of perfection,

but before you can stay,

you must pass the test.

the door is the judge,

it chooses who enters.

and there will be a day,

you will be given the chance,

to face the door.

be careful 'cause,

it only happens once.

comments, opinions, suggestions welcome :D

so...

what do you think?

New poem. comments welcome.:D?

It is a very interesting poem.

I think the poem is about death.

and going to heaven, the door would choose if you are good or bad and let the good ones in.

Yea, it only happens once as you only die one time.

I like the poem it made me feel like i need to do more good deeds to get pass this door.

New poem. comments welcome.:D?

It's interesting and simple. I think it wold be improved if you used the word "because" instead of "'cause" as this makes it seem more in keeping with the tone of the poem. The last line could be changed to "It happens just once" to make the rhythm smoother.

PS Happiness "reigns" would be the correct wording. Keep up the poetry, it's lovely!

New poem. comments welcome.:D?

comment:

It is a nice poem. It had decent word flow and makes sense when reading only once.

opinion:

I have opinions about everything, and my opinion of your poem is that it rates a 8 of 10. Maybe even a 9.

suggestion:

If it were me, I who have said 'A place where happiness abounds", rather than reigns.

There you have what you asked. comment, opinion, and suggestion.. huggles n squeezles.

New poem. comments welcome.:D?

I loved it, you do such nice poetry.